雅思写作范文分析：学校降低录取标准

Task Two

 

Some famous universities lower their academic requirements to enroll students who have outstanding athletic talents. To what extent do you agree with this practice? Give reasons based on your experience.

 

You should write at least 250 words and spend approximately 40 minutes on this task.

 

对范文的点评

 

Sample 1

 

It becomes more and more common that many universities, especially those famous universities, lower their academic standards to enrol students who have special athletic talents. I think this activity of universities is reasonable and accepted.

 

First, students who have special athletic talents often have poor academic scores. They maybe have no opportunities to receive higher education because of their poor studies. Universities which lower their academic standards to enrol them can make these students turn their dreams into realities. Sometimes those universities which enrol the students who have special athletic talents have better conditions for athletic students to improve their athletic levels.

 

Second. It is also very helpful for universities which accept athletic students to improve their fames. Competition between universities are extensive. Most famous universities pay their attentions not only to academic researches but to many other aspects, for example arts and sports. Good athletic scores can improve the fames of the universities which can attract more exelent students. All these are competitive for universities.

 

All above, enroling athletic students by lower their academic standards has more advantages for universities though it perhaps can bring some disadvantages to them. （190 words）

 

拼写错误：

 

fames T fame（不可数名词，不能有复数形式）

 

exelent T excellent

 

enroling T enrolling

 

作者的英文非常好，但因这个题目有一定的难度，对很多人来说，论点、论据都不能来得很便捷。这就造成有些人英文虽好，但无话可说的局面。于是，很多人出于字数和时间的压力，胡乱写一些词不达意的内容。这样的文章当然得不到好的分数。

 

此文论点鲜明，没有什么严重的错误，因此，字数就是最严重的问题了。此文可以得4或5段。请对比前后两文。